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ORIGINAL: JeffK

IMVHO

I think the para starting, "Georgia's mountain poet" is one too many paras quoting someone.

The others have enough "fill" around them, this seems to be 1 too many.

ORIGINAL: JohnDillworth
Gaius Marius was a great Roman General who would only fight on his own terms and at a place of his choosing. Initially, his Legions thought him a poor general at best and more likely a coward. His opponents would taunt him and try to get him to attack saying, "if you are such a great general why not come here and fight us" to which he would respond "surely if you were a great opponent you could make me do such a thing". Gaius Marius stuck to his guns and eventually his opponents attached him at the place of his choosing. With the sun at his back (by design) Gaius Marius annihilated a larger force at the Battle of Vercellae, saving Rome from a barbarian invasion. He was celebrated as the third founder of Rome. I say all of this because it frustrates some of the peanut gallery (myself included) that you let ships escape without air attack and allow divisions to sail to battle unopposed. I also say this because I thought a Roman analogy would be a nice change from yet another Civil War analogy Your a good General Dan. Stick to your guns

ORIGINAL: Bullwinkle58

"Garrison" VP losses are minor, but there are supply flow effects too, as well as potential destruction of base infrastructure. Randomized, and maybe also a functi0on of base size. I think there was a pretty significant change to the garrison penalty rules in a very early patch, but I don't recall the details.

ORIGINAL: Canoerebel

ORIGINAL: JeffK

IMVHO

I think the para starting, "Georgia's mountain poet" is one too many paras quoting someone.

The others have enough "fill" around them, this seems to be 1 too many.

Thanks, JeffK, for that thought. I'm going to lay the story aside for a few days or weeks. Then I'll come back to it with a fresher perspective. When I do, I'll give particular attention to the Byron Reece paragraph.

P.S. I've never done something like that before - working all night, beginning a story and seeing it through to the end (subject to lots of future editing). It was pretty fun. The hours flew by.

ORIGINAL: Canoerebel

John's going to spend the next few days with his mother; then we'll both be around Saturday to game; then I'm going to spend two days with my mom. All this developed very suddenly. So we'll mostly stand down for the next six days.

You know, even Jeb Stuart only rode around the Union Army twice.....

ORIGINAL: Canoerebel

ORIGINAL: Bullwinkle58

"Garrison" VP losses are minor, but there are supply flow effects too, as well as potential destruction of base infrastructure. Randomized, and maybe also a functi0on of base size. I think there was a pretty significant change to the garrison penalty rules in a very early patch, but I don't recall the details.

I foresaw the garrison issues coming, to an extent. I tried to take steps to meet the need, to an extent. But the Allied advance outstripped my ability to get units as far forward as needed. And then the opportunity to move on Gunzan fast outweighed the need to keep units at Shanghai.

ORIGINAL: paullus99

Again, if he even begins to think that his troops are going to be able to stand up to your forces, he's fooling himself.

ORIGINAL: Canoerebel

Yeah, when I refer to "poets," I mean all of us - collectively. Like BBfanboy says, there's a bit of poet in every one of us.

I'm not much of a poet. Really, I'm not one at all. I've written about eight poems that I'm not ashamed of. I've written a bunch that I am ashamed of. Some of the words that ended up "on paper" were incredibly bad.

But avid readers and avid writers often have a love affair with words. Some writers can make words sing. Some make them squeak in protest.

Searching for just the right word is fun. When you find it, the satisfaction is amazing. As Mark Twain said, the difference between a good word and the perfect words is as the difference between the lightning bug and lightning.

I read the story to my class today. Their reaction was what I had hoped for. But they are prejudiced - I knew they would appreciate the topic, and they know and tolerate my writing and speaking. Still, they make a good sounding board. For now, I'll put it aside for a few days, then re-read it with a fresh eye.

For words pass through the intellect first