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I have spotted an error:
 

Admiral Cunningham had two choices, return to base or engage the enemy at night. True to his fighting character he chose the former [emphasis mine] but [...]

 
To correct it and improve this sentence, I would suggest:
 
"Admiral Cunningham had two choices: return to base or engage the enemy at night. True to his fighting character, he chose the latter. For their part, the Italians - not believing [...]"

ORIGINAL: Shannon V. OKeets

A special request from Rob (Warspite21).

7th paragraph, the "Psychological" word seems wrongly spelled.

For the B-25H, why not also say that this is the only one version with no copilot ?

Guys
 
Thanks for the positive feed-back on the "old Lady". Apologies for some of the schoolboy spelling errors! As for referring to the RN as she....Marcus what can I say?!?!? As I wrote to Steve the other day, my goal is to get all the write-ups I have signed up for done and will then set about proof reading and cross checking for accuracy - but your comments in the meantime are most welcome.
 
Rob (Warspite1)

"while on route, she detonated a mine that caused major damage.... a speed of 15 knots therefter  "---> thereafter
 
Good luck with the proof reading [;)]
 

Here are some writeups from new contributors.

Andy has been spending a lot of time and effort revising the air unit writeups. But here are two new ones. The mixed composition of the Mexican air force makes the usual standard of presenting statistics inappropriate.

A second Mixed air unit writeup by Andy.

This is the first writeup by Birger. Looks good to me!

He is working on doing writeups for all the Japanese submarine units. The general style will be to pick one or two actual submarines based on the year built (and other unique aspects of the WIF unit) for anecdotal information. Here it is I-19, one of the 20 "Flying Subs".

ORIGINAL: Shannon V. OKeets

This is the first writeup by Birger. Looks good to me!

He is working on doing writeups for all the Japanese submarine units. The general style will be to pick one or two actual submarines based on the year built (and other unique aspects of the WIF unit) for anecdotal information. Here it is I-19, one of the 20 "Flying Subs".

Warspite1

Nice idea Birger - I shall look to do something similar for the CW submarines where possible.

ORIGINAL: Shannon V. OKeets

A second Mixed air unit writeup by Andy.

In the middle of the writeup... North Africa and the Mediterranian ---> Mediterranean.

I think my eyes hurt a bit now [;)]

Joshuatree

Once I have finished my naval write-ups how do you fancy proof reading these for me?

Warspite1

ORIGINAL: Shannon V. OKeets

This is the first writeup by Birger. Looks good to me!

He is working on doing writeups for all the Japanese submarine units. The general style will be to pick one or two actual submarines based on the year built (and other unique aspects of the WIF unit) for anecdotal information. Here it is I-19, one of the 20 "Flying Subs".

Not sure about this one, my english is not perfect so excuse me if I'm wrong here.
In the lower part of the writeup: Its captain Commander ---> shouldn't be this; It's ?

No "its captain Commander" is correct. It's=it is, your suggestion would mean "it is captain Commander".

"its" is the English exception to the rule on possessives.

Leading to the ever popular:

it's its captain, isn't it?

ORIGINAL: Ingtar

Leading to the ever popular:

it's its captain, isn't it?

Or:
Tis its captain's responsibility, isn't it?

Thanks Joshua..I got the Mediterranean fixed...
 
Andy

ORIGINAL: SewerStarFish

No "its captain Commander" is correct. It's=it is, your suggestion would mean "it is captain Commander".

"its" is the English exception to the rule on possessives.

It is possible though the the guy's name was Commander and as the capatain he would be captain commander...kinda like captain kangaroo. I did know a sergeant with a last name of major..and since there is a rank in the army of Sergeant Major..it got pretty confusing pretty quick when he was around.[:'(]

ORIGINAL: Sabre21

ORIGINAL: SewerStarFish

No "its captain Commander" is correct. It's=it is, your suggestion would mean "it is captain Commander".

"its" is the English exception to the rule on possessives.

It is possible though the the guy's name was Commander and as the capatain he would be captain commander...kinda like captain kangaroo. I did know a sergeant with a last name of major..and since there is a rank in the army of Sergeant Major..it got pretty confusing pretty quick when he was around.[:'(]

In the book Catch-22 there is a character named Major Major Major.

ORIGINAL: SewerStarFish

No "its captain Commander" is correct. It's=it is, your suggestion would mean "it is captain Commander".

"its" is the English exception to the rule on possessives.

Ofcourse, I stand corrected. [;)]

just to get this in.
 
Right Wright, write wright right, right. Right.

but on a technial note, navy guys can correct me.

the guy in charge of a ship is tittled Captain and can be of any rank. Therefore you could have Captain able seaman Jones or Captain Captain Smith.