Warspite1ORIGINAL: Josh
Okay, here we go [;)]
For starters a general question You write "Japan`s" instead of "Japan's". So uhm, that's an " ` " instead of an " ' " Same with IJN`s instead of IJN's.
Not sure if that's correct. I've noticed that you have used it in every writedown... so I'm not so sure if it's worth the trouble changing it all.
" The dates printed on the back of the counters
do not tie up in any meaningful way with build dates for the various classes of
Imperial Japanese Navy (IJN) submarine class and therefore the counter date
should be ignored in most cases. "
Shouldn't this be: ... various classes of the Imperial Japanese Navy... ? ... not sure though, the sentence doesn't read fluidly.. if you know what I mean.
".P The size of World War II Japanese submarines gave rise to further problems
too. They were very slow to submerge and so were much easier to attack and kill
once found. Generally, the maximum depth they could operate at was significantly
shallower than their contempories."
Contemporaries... right?
" As such
they were faster and could dive further, although their basic armament was the
same."
..could dive... deeper?
So far so good, keep up your good work,
Josh
Pleased you are still around! [:)]
Well what do you know? I've been using the wrong button for the last two years!! I will amend going forward - although I cannot face going back into every write up for this [:(].
I have re-written the rubbish sentence re the counter dates - let me know if this reads better (see below)?
I think my spelling of Contemporaries is correct?
Agreed deeper is a better word in this context - amendment made.
.P These World In Flames counters represent a number of submarines rather than
any specific individual submarine. Note, the dates printed on the back of the WIF
counters do not necessarily tie up with actual build dates for the various
Imperial Japanese Navy (IJN) submarine classes. As a result, these counter dates
should be ignored for the purposes of these write-ups.
Thanks for your feed-back as ever [:)]