English Text Corrections

[Luckspeare]

Militia Commemorate Plaque
"We had a giant silver and gold commemorative plaque placed and the militia troops were moved to tears by the honor you bestowed upon them. The militia units gained +22 government points."

What are government points?

Also, this sentence is technically correct but a bit strange... I've never seen a giant plaque. A plaque is a metal plate etched with text and/or imagery placed on something else. Might it be better imagined as a monument to the militia? If so, suggested language:

"We had a commemorative monument decorated with a silver and gold plaque erected in the capitol. The militia were moved to tears by the honor bestowed upon them, and all militia units gain +x [morale?]."

[Trifler]

When designing an aircraft with both an A2A weapon and an A2G weapon (possibly any two weapons in general), there is a sentence in the model description that says, "Its also equiped with ..." This should say, "It's also equipped with ..."

[Luckspeare]

Looks like there's an incorrect variable in the leader's history log for the newly-joined governor of a diplomatically-protected minor joining the player's nation when another major attacks it.

"When his country joined Mericca, became governor."

Except Mericca is the enemy major who attacked it, and the minor nation joined me to squirm away from Mericca.

Also, while you're on this particular point, I would make a minor change in phrasing:

"Became governor when [his/her] country joined [nation it joined]."

[Luckspeare]

This dialog is a little unclear.

Our intel operatives are receiving disturbing reports from Hochavia. It seems that mysterious mercenaries are joining their forces. They must be building up for an attack on federation. If you make a public announcement that we intend to conquer Hochavia it will very probably deter the arrival of more mercenaries.

Do we make a public declaration of war?

"They must be building up for an attack on federation." -- is "federation" a placeholder for the player nation name?

Also, I might suggest this line be changed to something like: "I believe they are building up for an attack on us."

[TimeAndTactics]

Spelling (in version #95)

The pop-up for the Militia Chief feat has several spelling errors

"Leader is also a Militia Chief. Keeps the Miltiia happen if at lest one chief is present in your Cabinet. If employed as Zone Governor gives a bonus to Miilitancy."

* "Miltiia" should be "Militia"
* "happen" should be "happy"
* "lest" should be "least"
* "Miilitancy" should be "Militancy"

[Trifler]

On the Tech screen, for Advanced Sensors:
- It currently says, "Giving access to improved sensor equipment will increase your equipments and troops' recon ranges all over the board."
- This should say, "Provides improved sensor equipment that increases the recon ranges of your troops all across the board."

[zgrssd]

ORIGINAL: Trifler

On the Tech screen, for Advanced Sensors:
- It currently says, "Giving access to improved sensor equipment will increase your equipments and troops' recon ranges all over the board."
- This should say, "Provides improved sensor equipment that increases the recon ranges of your troops all across the board."

A proper description of Improved Sensors would be:
"Doubles units Recon. Does not apply to Trucks." Potentially add "not more then +5", if applicable.

[Trifler]

ORIGINAL: zgrssd

ORIGINAL: Trifler

On the Tech screen, for Advanced Sensors:
- It currently says, "Giving access to improved sensor equipment will increase your equipments and troops' recon ranges all over the board."
- This should say, "Provides improved sensor equipment that increases the recon ranges of your troops all across the board."

A proper description of Improved Sensors would be:
"Doubles units Recon. Does not apply to Trucks." Potentially add "not more then +5", if applicable.

To put that into a complete sentence then, it should say something like, "Provides improved sensor equipment that effectively doubles the recon range of troops all across the board. Does not apply to Trucks."

[Luckspeare]

This is not only a textual correction, but apparently a couple of game-mechanic discrepancies as well.

"Forsees" -> "Foresees"
"... it might not be to late" -> "... it might not be too late"
"High leader of Zelus seems like a logical person." -> "The high leader of Zelus seems like a logical person."



"Our relation turned Hostile."
not strictly required, but is a little bit off -- suggested replacement -> "Our relations have turned Hostile."

Also, I noticed that Mind +3 doesn't happen like the previous screen said it would.
Also, there is no actual roll. It says there is, but I reloaded and redid this event multiple times, and it's always 97. Looks like it's not tied to either a skill or roll.

[Luckspeare]

(consolidated both posts and images into above post)

[Trifler]

@Luckspeare
I agree with the above, except I would capitalize "High Leader" since it's a title of office.

[BlueTemplar]

Also, there is no actual roll. It says there is, but I reloaded and redid this event multiple times, and it's always 97.

Games use pseudo-random number generators, which are functions with "unpredictable" results. The "rolls" are based on a "seed" number. A P-RNG will always give the same result from the same seed. (Then usually the result becomes the next seed, and so on...)

Computer clock time in (milli)seconds is often used as a varying seed to make the P-RNG result vary.

(Many "rolls" in SE indeed seem to have varying seeds, as can be seen from getting different results by running turn processing again from the same end turn autosave. I guess that you found an exception ?)

Many games allow you to control this behaviour with a "fixed seed" (or not) option (which tends to apply to everything).

[zgrssd]

"Our relation turned Hostile."
not strictly required, but is a little bit off -- suggested replacement -> "Our relations have turned Hostile."

Also, I noticed that Mind +3 doesn't happen like the previous screen said it would.
Also, there is no actual roll. It says there is, but I reloaded and redid this event multiple times, and it's always 97.

The game only uses a pseudorandom number generator.
Those will always give the same result, given the same inputs.

Saving the pRNGs State (or already having made he rolles before showing it to the player) prevents savescumming.

[Luckspeare]

I've never seen a roll which is 100% the same every reload. Well, I should say, difficulty numbers are pre-rolled and will not change. But the actual roll the player's commander makes always has some random element to it. This is the first time since I started playing SE that the roll is always literally the same number. On that first screen, it doesn't appear that the roll is based on any skill, either -- normally it will show you the skill and chances.

To test further, since this should normally be a diplomacy roll, modified by Charisma, I used the medal leader strat that gives +10 to charisma rolls then did it again -- still 97. So even if this is a case of predetermined roll, if it was a diplomacy-based roll, it should still be 107 now, I would think.

[BlueTemplar]

Yeah, *that* sounds like a bug.

[Luckspeare]

I'll report that aspect of this as a bug in the appropriate subforum then.

[OrnluWolfjarl]

High leader seems to be the official title for their leader. I think it should say "The High Leader"

[zgrssd]

ORIGINAL: OrnluWolfjarl

High leader seems to be the official title for their leader. I think it should say "The High Leader"

My instinct tells me to not subsume the gramatical Article into the Name.

There can be cases where you do not want the article as part of the title. And any text that needs it, can add it to the text: "The [insert ruler title] [insert ruler name], does/says something"

[OrnluWolfjarl]

Oh yeah, I think I added that The due to the text of the particular message.

Also, unrelated to the above, but there was another comment about the militia plaque. The event clearly states the plaque is meant to be placed on a memorial already, and the militia are just asking you to fund it, so that message makes sense and needs no corrections, besides any typos that might be there.

[zgrssd]

The highest Respiratory Hazard Level is poorly named with "Insidious".
The word indicates stuff like Stealthy, Methodical and Ambush - the exact opposite of "Instant death without Envirosuit", what it stands for.

If there is any level that is Insidious, it is 1 or 2 - because it might fool you into thinking it is sufficient to use no protection/only filters.

A proper Term to use instead? "Instant Death". A BHL of "Instant Death" makes clear that it is the worst level.