ORIGINAL: Onime No Kyo
And by USS Enterprise I'm sure you meant the NCC-1701D. [:D]
The D model before 1944?! [&:] [:-]
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ORIGINAL: Onime No Kyo
And by USS Enterprise I'm sure you meant the NCC-1701D. [:D]








"What ship?" There was a short pause.
"Reuben James," said Barnecott. "I'm in." He tossed money into the pot. The other men in the game halted, looking at him.
ORIGINAL: Canoerebel
Cuttlefish, a question from an editor (I hope you don't mind).
Where did you learn to write dialogue; not the substance, rather the style? Many writers aren't familiar with the style and thus would run the dialogue from different speakers in the same paragraph, which is confusing and therefore wrong. But you don't. You write dalogue in fiction format just as though it were your profession or something you had learned through college or carreer. It's possible you could pick it up just by being an avid reader, but I wondered.
I really enjoy your AAR.

ORIGINAL: Canoerebel
Cuttlefish, a question from an editor (I hope you don't mind).
Where did you learn to write dialogue; not the substance, rather the style? Many writers aren't familiar with the style and thus would run the dialogue from different speakers in the same paragraph, which is confusing and therefore wrong. But you don't. You write dalogue in fiction format just as though it were your profession or something you had learned through college or carreer. It's possible you could pick it up just by being an avid reader, but I wondered.
I really enjoy your AAR.






"The fact that none of you will last ten minutes out there doesn't bother me," he said. "It's the thought of the good men that you might take with you." He sighed deeply. "Maybe the Army can use you."
"Still, I have to try," he said in resignation. "My name is Petty Officer First Class Jorgenson. I am your Company Commander. You will address me as 'sir.' You will address all your instructors in this manner. We will teach you..." From somewhere in the ranks somebody sneezed. Jorgenson broke off and walked briskly over to the offending recruit.